Second Screening: Feedback

From my peers the feedback was much more positive than from the first screening but my piece still had a lot of work to be done on it before it even gets close to be considered 'good'. This is my first film so it is bound to be a process, for that reason I am sticking with a lot of what I have got and will try to improve upon these foundations. As said by my teacher, "loads of potential but dissapointing..."

Second Screening: Potential not yet harnessed

Second screening: New and improved but not perfect

First Draft: A disaster

Easy to say, our first drat didn't go too well. We were unable to capture a good enough amount of footage to present and give an accurate representation of where we wanted our project to go. Mainly due to actors not showing up at the desired film meets we essentially had no first draft, only about 28 seconds of foliage. None the less here it is:

Poster

Just for fun but also for inspiration I created a film poster of our film.

Pitch

Restitution is the exciting story of a not so distant, not so impossible, dystopian future. The greed and selfishness of the rich and powerful ran the world its economy and its people into the ground. Massive uproar broke out overthrowing officials and authorities and sending them into hiding. Now only those who are willing to kill and assault to get what they want own the streets and all decent examples of humanity are suppressed. However, there is hope an organisation, a gang of vigilante’s lead by their leader, known as ‘V’, plan to restore the world back to the way it was with a few minor improvements, their primary objective to be the world’s Restitution.

In the pitch we will go into detail about:

The films narrative,

Characters - who they are and what they plan to do,

 The plots vision - where it would go,

And our choice of costume and props to portray different themes and feelings.

We will also discuss key editing techniques to be used including our use of colour correction that will be used all the way through the film to make every shot darker and more sinister to never lose the vibe of the dystopian future.

Finally we will discuss exactly what we want to achieve and what we might do if we had a bigger budget.

Shot List

RESTITUTION (Working Title)

Shot List

[Establishing shot]Shot of scenic bridge in local park.

[Slight panning shot]Kids running around having fun.

[Close up] Trickling water down stream.

[Extreme (Re-)Establishing shot] Massive clearing from afar.

[(Re-)Establishing shot] Man kneeling on plastic, opposing man                                standing and facing him.

[Extreme close up, High Angle] John’s face focal point between eyes.

[Extreme close up, High Angle] John’s hand bound by zip-ties.

[Extreme close up, High Angle] John’s mouth covered by duct-tape.

[Fast pan POV, Low Angle] Clearing from John’s perspective.

[Mid-shot] ‘V’s torso and above, looking upward from ground.

[Extreme close up, from side] ‘V’s lips as he speaks John’s name.

[Extreme close up, from side] ‘V’ swallowing deeply.

[OtS, Low Angle] John looking at ‘V’ as he draws a book.

[Extreme close up, High Angle] John’s eyes.

[POV, Low Angle] John’s perspective ‘V’s lower region, as ‘V’ kneels to his           eye level.

[Two-shot, from side] John and ‘V’ stand (and kneel) off.

[Close up, High Angle] ‘V’ turning pages of the book.

[Extreme close up, High Angle]John’s name in book in 'V's hand.

[Close up, match on action] ‘V’ looking up to eye-level with John.

[Close up] ‘V’ ripping duct-tape off John.

[Close up, from side] John spitting at ‘V’

[Mid shot, low angle] ‘V’ wiping spit off face swinging at John.

[Mid shot, match on action] John getting hit across face.

[Close up, High angle] Blood hitting plastic.

[Mid shot] ‘V’ Monologue of allegations.

[Mid-Close up shot] John responding.

[Mid-shot] ‘V’ standing up turning to other gang member drawing gun.

[Mid-shot from other side] Turning to member, holding gun up.

[Long shot] Other member shaking head.

[Close up] ‘V’ shrugging and turning to John to create an [OtS shot]

[Mid-shot] John shouting at ‘V’

[Mid-shot] ‘V’ Responding and turning around.

[Extreme wide shot] ‘V’ turning quickly and shooting John who falls                     forward.

[OtS to Close up] ‘V’ commanding other member to clear up the mess.

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